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Tuesday, October 19, 2010

THe Amanda Project

Hey Mrs. Tosto! This blog is cool and so this is my first draft of my WHOLE intro.

Secrets, treasures, and friendship, a mystery undefined... What kind of person can pull something that? That person would be Amanda Valentino. Amanda has been missing for over a month and she's been leaving mysterious letters for three kids, and only those three kids. The kids are Callie, Nia and Hal. This is because of Amanda's life. Amanda goes to a different school every year and she keeps her feelings and her personal life to herself. "she keeps her friends close, and her enemies closer..." If you try keeping a secret from her, she'll be sure to find out.

10 comments:

  1. hey i have no clue how 2 write something lol help?

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  2. I'm a little confused with your first sentence... it says what kind of person can pull something that? Something that does not sounds right.

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  3. Not a book i would read but the intro is good!

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  4. help! i dont know how to write with this! lol

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  5. Dorothy,

    Ok. First, your intro needs more structure. It's very creative, but you are missing some things. 1. Your thesis should be the opening SENTENCE of the paragraph. 2. You need to mention the title and author, 3. You need to also state the 2-3 points that you will be speaking about that support your thesis. We'll work together in class. Good start though.

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  6. grrrrrrrrrrrrrrr i cant figure out how to post my thesis arghhh

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  7. lol thanks for the ideas. i'll try to fix it. and kevin.. just click "new post" and type then click "publish"... -_-

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